For my Intro to Creative Writing class we had to write a social action poem. When I wrote this, it was around the time when the class had the discussion of Liberty vs. Order. So that was my social action poem topic. Feel free to comment, the poem is still in the revision stages, so your comments would actually be helpful. Thanks for taking the time to read it!
Free as a Caged Bird
The burning star above our heads is beating down upon us,
it challenges our will to practice our rights, the
sweet smell of sweat on our body and souls, our sore throats, and
tears represents our dissent. We gather
on the black gravel road, thousands are there, our voice is loud.
Our voices are free and powerful like hurricane winds,
we slip through the government’s hands,
we march like a sea, but separate for no one.
Then, I feel a baton jab my left side and a shove from my right,
I look up and for a moment I am in the shadow of the policemen,
Atop horses, bikes, with steel toe boots, they wear
the uniform of government.
They have just disrupted a peaceful bee hive.
They are peppered among the crowds,
They are hungry hawks and we are little mice.
Waiting for us to be separated from our herd.
They fear us like the night and we fear them right back.
We are face down and hog tied on the streets, I feel the hot gravel sticking into my cheek
The sun shows us no mercy.
Our voice is broken from the crush of the tidal wave.
We are as free as a caged bird,
inside the walls of the government.
Nice, very solid. Good writing. That is what she's looking for. I would be surprised it you didn't pull an A.
ReplyDeleteyour poem truthly reflects on the concept of liberty and order. It gives concrete examples that makes your poem to be very powerful. You have the talent to creat this kind of poems that reflects the feeling and it raises the issue. Very GOOD poem and I am sure you will get an "A" and it is an honor to read to poem.
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